Re: My Essay on the New French Bill
ace, I read your essay, I ‘d like to point out a few things:
First of all, why are you constantly comparing The Armenian Genocide to the Holocaust? Enough has been talked about that issue if you really wanted to “compare” the AG to something, you could have done it with that of Darfur or Rwanda, which are more recent, unpunished and are not being discussed in general.
On the first page (6th line), it reads: “A number of European states […] have attempted to prohibit the most extreme and polarized cases of this misuse: the Holocaust denial.”
Your choice of words like "the most …is the holocaust", is not nice, someone could feel that you are minimizing what happened to Armenians compared to xxxs, thus the existent law is ok for the Holocaust and not for the AG which is not on the same scale. (Unconsciously, you are implying that notion to your reader). There are more examples as well.
The idea of writing an essay on the issue was good but I felt like I read an essay on the Holocaust and anti-Semitism rather than the Armenian Genocide and the new bill. You should have focused more on the latter.
Originally posted by ace
ace, I read your essay, I ‘d like to point out a few things:
First of all, why are you constantly comparing The Armenian Genocide to the Holocaust? Enough has been talked about that issue if you really wanted to “compare” the AG to something, you could have done it with that of Darfur or Rwanda, which are more recent, unpunished and are not being discussed in general.
On the first page (6th line), it reads: “A number of European states […] have attempted to prohibit the most extreme and polarized cases of this misuse: the Holocaust denial.”
Your choice of words like "the most …is the holocaust", is not nice, someone could feel that you are minimizing what happened to Armenians compared to xxxs, thus the existent law is ok for the Holocaust and not for the AG which is not on the same scale. (Unconsciously, you are implying that notion to your reader). There are more examples as well.
The idea of writing an essay on the issue was good but I felt like I read an essay on the Holocaust and anti-Semitism rather than the Armenian Genocide and the new bill. You should have focused more on the latter.
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