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One of My Songs.. Check It Out If Interested

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    One of My Songs.. Check It Out If Interested

    This is one of my songs I finished about a week ago. I doubt it'll be used for anything, so take it for what it is. If anything, it'll be on my upcoming mixtape, still not sure. It's called, "Down The Road" and it talks to life as if it was a human, and I wrote it as if we have a relationship. All I get here is hate because of rap, so the haters are welcome to drop some nonsense.

    http://s12.yousendit.com/d.aspx?id=3MTOW9Y128TJN1GIG8I2T9OP3V


    [Intro]
    Lord..
    I just wanna say..
    I'm thankful for everything you've ever done..
    But sometimes,
    I just don't get it.
    I don't understand..
    Why do what you do?
    Why take all these innocent people? (What am I supposed to do now?)
    Take ME instead.. (You took my family)
    Why not just end it for me right now? (I've got no one)
    I don't know what to do anymore..
    But I hope you keep lookin' out for me.. (God, please answer me)
    Until the day I,
    Come home.. (I love you)


    [Verse 1]
    It's a battle within, which I'll never win
    If I get through this, I promise to never sin again
    If I live through this, and you give me a second chance
    I'll keep a straight back, never retrace my path.
    I'll forget the past, never look back
    Always keep on track, and always do the math.
    Off the bat, I can say I got no friends, all alone,
    So when I'm awake in the morning, I've got no one.
    I look around and see happy couples, knowin' the humble
    Look through my life, and all I see misfortune and trouble..
    I'm a nervous wreck, yet you're left strong
    My heart's been broken to pieces and stepped on.
    You were always there for me, better and for worse
    Better yet, you were the first,
    Should've left me while I was hurt.
    Now I'm down the road, crying in the rain
    Trying to regain, my name, by trying it all over again..

    [Chorus x2]
    I'm going down the road, all alone
    And I can't find home, freezing in the cold.
    No one knows, what I've been through
    If I could only show, how much I love you.


    [Verse 2]
    I'm just a kid, confused and misled
    Sitting in darkness, listening to the voices in my head.
    The noise said I'm next to be dead
    But God wouldn't take my life until I take theirs.
    We're all human, learning from our mistakes
    Life is one long dream, death comes when you awake.
    And I'm far in this nightmare, I gotta live
    I gotta see my kids, and meet my final chick.
    Why is our relationship love and hate
    Because we love to hate, each other,
    And at the same time, hate to love each other.
    I'm just like every other person you know
    With emotions bottled up, which I just can't show.
    And it grows, within, I do this all for you
    'Till it becomes too much to take, and I take it on you.
    If it wasn't for you, I would be gone, end up lost
    I pay the price for livin', but i can't afford the cost..

    [Chorus x2]
    I'm going down the road, all alone
    And I can't find home, freezing in the cold.
    No one knows, what I've been through
    If I could only show, how much I love you.

    [Verse 3]
    I look up to you, more than anyone else
    And when I'm struggling, you're the one I come to for help.
    When I'm down and no ones around,
    You're always beside me, watching me, without making a sound.
    It's a sense of security, when the times are hard
    You'll always be with me, until my number is called.
    No matter what happens, no matter what I do
    You look past the lies, and always search for the truth.
    You made me honest, loyal, and keep me to my word,
    Even when I'm hurt, you keep me right down on earth.
    It'ss love I can't describe, a vibe that can't be tried,
    It can't be right, I think about us every night.
    It's too perfect to be true, but on the other hand
    I'm mad, because you're two faced, and you'll never undestand.
    You put me through hell, even when I'm in a situation
    Where my heart's racin', i keep pacin', patiently waitin' for the date..

    [Chorus x2]
    I'm going down the road, all alone
    And I can't find home, freezing in the cold.
    No one knows, what I've been through
    If I could only show, how much I love you.
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    At least come in here and say, "No one's interested"

    Drop SOME sort of feedback. Don't sleep, wake up

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    • #3
      Cool song.


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      • #4
        Originally posted by oNe-wAy
        At least come in here and say, "No one's interested"

        Drop SOME sort of feedback. Don't sleep, wake up

        The idea of the Intro is good but I find it a little cheesy and "crowded." Less text and a little bit of emotion/anger and spice may help!
        Overall, the song is easy to listen, the music is agreeable, it groves and one can sing along the Chorus. That is good!
        Personally, I find that the text is a little "dense" and not enough silences in your rap. I would use less text, but more "catchy" statements that can be remembered!
        Also, you're not always in tempo and the rhyme does not always follow the music; a good example would be:

        "It can't be right, I think about us every night."


        Keep the good work and thank you for sharing!
        What if I find someone else when looking for you? My soul shivers as the idea invades my mind.

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        • #5
          ^ That's good considering this song isn't gonna be used for anything. It took a few minutes to write, and a little more to record/put together. The real songs are coming soon. Thanks for checking it out

          BTW, does this one song, automatically make me everyones favorite Armenian rapper? Considering all the other sucky ones, I personally think I'm in the top. I know all the Armenian Rappers, and the realest one's are One-2 and Marvelous

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          • #6
            Originally posted by oNe-wAy
            BTW, does this one song, automatically make me everyones favorite Armenian rapper? Considering all the other sucky ones, I personally think I'm in the top. I know all the Armenian Rappers, and the realest one's are One-2 and Marvelous
            We can grade you only after you give us your copy of the tests! Is that fair enough?

            Good luck and work hard!
            What if I find someone else when looking for you? My soul shivers as the idea invades my mind.

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            • #7
              On it's way. Believe it

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              • #8
                Originally posted by oNe-wAy
                On it's way. Believe it
                We'll be watching you!
                What if I find someone else when looking for you? My soul shivers as the idea invades my mind.

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                • #9
                  Watching me? As I record..?

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                  • #10
                    Ya were gonna watch you as you record =P It was really good I like it. Keep up the good work.

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