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    Heres the speech for my sisters wedding, which is taking place on the 16th of July. Can you guys let me know what you think? The length isnt a problem but I think I can improove it. Thanks for your help!

    Good afternoon ladies and gentlemen,

    It is very nice to see everyone gathered here for this blessed occasion.

    There is something special about watching someone you value deeply find his or her one true love. Christine is my sister, and she definitely fills this category. Christine has an amazing passion for life for the people she chooses to share it with. While growing up together the majority of sisters share a great deal-not always willingly mind you. Those of you whom have a same sex sibling may relate to the struggle one faces such as “borrowing” jewelry, money, and clothes. Arguing about which Backstreet Boy was hotter, or trying to start a band and dreaming of making it big. Lest I forget the dreaded constant “I’m telling mom!!” Surprisingly, Christine and I both survived those bitter battles to save our belongings from the evil grasp of each other’s hands.

    I have very fond memories of Christine and I. Two that I am particularly fond of are pretending to pick berries off of our mother’s houseplants to make invisible salads. Or the time she came running to me claiming she had walked on air!

    And when she first brought Max over to meet our family. She glowed with pride. I have never seen a better couple that compliments each other so well. You two complete the pieces of the mold that life throws our way.

    Christine, you look so beautiful. I love you. Always have and always will. Life often throws us many paths for us to choose to walk down on. Today, you are starting a new journey on a new path in life as a wife and one day-a mother. But wife and mother aside, you will always be my sister. I never told you how much I thank you for supporting me, and giving me a voice when I could not speak. Thank you for every memory, every tear and every laugh. I look forward to sharing more.

    Max, I am very pleased to finally be able to open my arms to you and embrace you as a brother and as the man who completes my sister. You have brought her much happiness and I trust in you that you will continue to do so. You are a good man and I wouldn’t want anyone else to be with my sister. I love you too. And remember, every man needs a wife because something’s things go wrong and you can’t always blame everything on the government, eh?

    Before I end my speech I would like to read a poem:

    A gentle word like a spark of light,
    Illuminates the soul
    And as each sound grows deeper,
    It is love that makes us whole.

    There is no corner, no nook, nor dark place
    That love cannot fill,
    And when the world starts causing waves,
    It is the embrace of a loved one that makes them still.

    Yes, it always speaks to us,
    In sweet honesty and truth,
    The caring heart keeps out the rain,
    But it is love,
    Which builds the ultimate roof.

    As you join together this blessed day,
    Supporting each other in your life,
    May you grow together in compassion, happiness and love,
    As newlyweds---husband and wife.

    My new brother Max Fuentes, My beautiful sister Christine,
    Your union gives us greatest pride.
    Good health! Great wealth! And a lasting line!
    On your union, may Gods glory shine.

    Cheers to the happy couple!

    Congratulations!

  • #2
    Originally posted by sad_eyes
    Good afternoon ladies and gentlemen,

    It is very nice to see everyone gathered here for this blessed occasion.
    Are wedding receptions "blessed"? Isn't it the actual ceremony that would be "blessed".

    Originally posted by sad_eyes
    Lest I forget
    This is rather old-fashioned English that probably nobody would have spoken out loud even when it was in fashion. "Let's not forget" sounds better.

    Originally posted by sad_eyes
    I have very fond memories of Christine and I.
    Search for Nairi's "Me or I" thread.

    Originally posted by sad_eyes
    Today, you are starting a new journey on a new path in life as a wife and one day-a mother. But wife and mother aside, you will always be my sister.
    You are imposing your view of what a marriage is for. Even if your sister is in agreement with those views, it might be offensive to those present who are married and do not wish to have children, or hurtful to those present who are married and maybe having difficulty in having children.
    Plenipotentiary meow!

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    • #3
      Originally posted by sad_eyes
      Those of you whom have a same sex sibling may relate to the struggle one faces such as “borrowing” jewelry, money, and clothes.
      "who", not "whom".

      I have very fond memories of Christine and I.
      Indeed, "Christine and me", not "I"

      And when she first brought Max over to meet our family. She glowed with pride.
      "And when she first brought Max over to meet our family, she glowed with pride." Although in speech this doesn't make much difference, it might make it easier for you when you're reading it out loud.

      Life often throws us many paths for us to choose to walk down on.
      I would prefer "Life often throws many paths for us to choose to walk on", but it's a personal choice.

      Today, you are starting a new journey on a new path in life as a wife and one day-a mother.
      "...and one day as a mother", I think would make it clearer in speech. Keep in mind that people will hear it only once, and that's it.

      And remember, every man needs a wife because something’s things go wrong
      "sometimes things go wrong"? Or "some things go wrong"? Not sure what you mean.

      It's a very moving speech! Good luck!

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      • #4
        Originally posted by nairi
        Indeed, "Christine and me", not "I"
        Actually, "Christine and myself" is more grammatically correct than "me".

        Compare with "I have fond memories of myself" vs. "I have fond memories of me".

        Or "He has fond memories of himself" vs. "He has fond memories of him" where "him" cannot refer to "He", but must refer to another male person.

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        • #5
          BOOOOOOOOOOORING ...

          If you want to make a good wedding speech, follow this formula:

          1. Say something embarassing about your sister ... make a joke.
          2. Say something very emotionally deep (keep this part short)
          3. Wrap it up with a heart felt set of wishes

          #1 has to be really funny to get the crowd to listen. #2 is where you will win them over so it has to be the most intelligent and well rehearsed part ... #3 has to be short, sweet, and something that will make them cheer.

          I can't emphasise this enough... BE LOUD .. do not mumble ... be firm and assertive or else people will just tune out and ignore you and give you the "oh she's giving a speech, how cute" look.

          Keep it short and to the point ... no poems, no reading from a paper, NONE of that.

          Stand up and act like you are talking to the people and especially to your sister. DO NOT DO NOT DO NOT act like you are reading. Yes, this means practice it 50 times in your head and in front of a mirror if you must.

          Good luck .. and again, be loud and be funny and don't be overly dramatic with the fancy words.
          this post = teh win.

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          • #6
            I think it's all about personalizing what you're saying. If this is you, then do it. If it's not, it'll only come across as fake.

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            • #7
              Originally posted by sad_eyes
              Good afternoon ladies and gentlemen,

              It is very nice to see everyone gathered here for this blessed occasion.
              As already mentioned, no "blessed" ... it's an "awesome" occasion... "amazing" occasion ... something more informal, something to immediately establish a sort of ease with the crowd. "blessed occasion" makes it sound too formal and disconnects you from the people you are trying to talk to.

              I'll fix the rest as we go:

              "There is something special about watching someone you value deeply find his or her one true love. Christine is my sister." that's it .. end it there.

              "She has an amazing passion for life for the people she chooses to share it with. Growing up together, many sisters share a great deal-not always willingly-mind you. (ha ha ha here) Many of you can relate to the amazing struggles such as “borrowing” jewelry, money, and clothes ... arguing about which Backstreet Boy was hotter, or trying to start a band and dreaming of making it big ... and of course there is always the “I’m telling mom!!” blackmail. Surprisingly, Christine and I both survived those bitter-sweet battles to save our belongings from the evil grasp of each other’s hands."

              That part is good and funny. I like it.

              "I have very fond memories with Christine. I am particularly fond of us pretending to pick berries off our mother’s houseplants to make invisible salads. Mmmmmmmm invisible salaaaaaad! (ok maybe too cheesy ) Or the time she came running to me claiming she had walked on air!"

              "And when she first brought Max over to meet our family. She glowed with pride. I have never seen a better couple that compliments each other so well."

              Ditch this: "You two complete the pieces of the mold that life throws our way." It's just too much.

              The rest is ok ... it's all in the delivery:


              "Christine, you look so beautiful. I love you. Always have and always will. Life often throws us many paths for us to choose to walk down on. Today, you are starting a new journey on a new path in life as a wife and one day-a mother. But wife and mother aside, you will always be my sister. I never told you how much I thank you for supporting me, and giving me a voice when I could not speak. Thank you for every memory, every tear and every laugh. I look forward to sharing more."

              "Max, I am very pleased to finally be able to open my arms to you and embrace you as a brother and as the man who completes my sister. You have brought her much happiness and I trust in you that you will continue to do so. You are a good man and I wouldn’t want anyone else to be with my sister. I love you too. And remember, every man needs a wife because something’s things go wrong and you can’t always blame everything on the government, eh?"

              DITCH the poem ... give it to them as a gift on a piece of paper or something. Plaster it all over the wedding hall.

              "Cheers to the happy couple!

              Congratulations!"
              Last edited by Sip; 06-24-2005, 02:28 PM.
              this post = teh win.

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              • #8
                If it was my sisters wedding speech I would say "Well, enjoy, don't get divorced and if you beat my sister I'll kill you."

                That speech is entirely too long.
                Achkerov kute.

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                • #9
                  Well I cut out the poem, after reading your guy's comments yeah I realized that was the wrong way to go. I changed a few words around and cut out some parts, I am satisfied with it now. Thanks alot for your help

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                  • #10
                    I think it's great.

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