Poetry Corner

[SxyDon]

A Poem From The Heart - Please post opinions

As I sit here
And think to myself
Do you think of me?
Do you still want me?
Do you still love me?
It burns me inside to think you’re with someone else
It burns me inside to just think you’re not mine
I look around me
Trying to find how to get these feelings
How to get these thoughts out of my mind
I feel so lonely
I feel so depressed
Without you I feel empty
What can I do to reverse time?
To undo the things that got me feeling and thinking this way
Tell me
Do you still think of me?

[sad_eyes]

I think its quite good. Actually, it makes me remember an ex of mine. Bravo!

[HyeJinx1984]

Great, now you got me thinking of all my old crushes and "almost coulda beens"... *le sigh*

Seriously though, nice little poem.

[SxyDon]

Its what i felt

Its what i was feeling and it kinda helped by being able to share it with others in this fashion.

[Anonymouse]

What's the point of this poem? Why is it in General Armenian Talk? This belongs in the Poetry Corner. Why don't you newbies browse the site and use some COMMON SENSE before posting your stuff?

By the way, your poem was generic. Just my two cents.

[XxgoeyxX]

You have a lot of potential. I think if you just expressed a little more it would be a nice poem. Everyone feels what you wrote, but I'm sure you have more feelings about this subject. Thats what I try to do with my poems. Even though they sux half the time.

[SagGal]

As I sit here
And think to myself
Do you think of me?
Do you still want me?
Do you still love me?
It burns me inside to think you’re with someone else
It burns me inside to just think you’re not mine
I look around me
Trying to find how to get these feelings
How to get these thoughts out of my mind
I feel so lonely
I feel so depressed
Without you I feel empty
What can I do to reverse time?
To undo the things that got me feeling and thinking this way
Tell me
Do you still think of me?

Nice.

I kind of like poems like this because it is simple (not the feelings I'm sure) and right to the point. Very straighforward.

[Margi]

ok ok, i'll give it a shot...this is a poem i call...

The Armo thugs

You can hear them coming,
their modified civics are humming.
ludacris music is blaring,
and just what the hell are they wearing?
with 5 pounds of fake gold around their neck,
they try to hide that their life's a wreck.
bragging about the price of their fubu coats,
they haven't even heard the name of Mesrob Mashdots.
they might call you a homie or bro
and will compliment you on your new afro.
sadly enough, they still call themselves armos,
and down the drain our reputation goes...

hmm, nothing too special, I gave it a shot though...

THis is sooo true.

[angelik22]

yea i also like that one good one baron i totally agree too- and u got a good way with words ~there was a time when poetry used to be my life- but recently i feel like that part of me is dying off and i dont like it at all- i wish i could write liek i used to- i think my brian is fried!

[SxyDon]

ill try a different approach next time im in the mood of doing this.