Poetry Corner

[sSsflamesSs]

The last word breaks the rhyme cycle, tsk tsk tsk.

Hehe, it's better than me though. I got nothing. :shock:

[sSsflamesSs]

OK kids, I'm giving it a shot...this is the 2nd poem I've ever written, but you HARSH CRITICS (be gentle) only get this one because allmighty Anonymouse made it perfectly clear that we can't talk about "xxxx like flowers". Anyway, keep in mind that I'm a beginner and I just now wrote it at 2am, so some of it might not click right. Don't laugh, please?


The Cycle

Born into this life alone
This simple cycle we were never shown
For every person that was delivered to earth
Was certain to experience a lonely birth

From day 1 to infancy
I am giddy as can be
With head as smooth as “baby butt skin”
Nasty treasures wrapped up with a safety pin

Crawling as a little bug
I begin to explore this dirty rug
For being a toddler spells out trouble
The accidents that happen most likely double

On I go toward increased mobility
As my legs show me their availability
Learning to speak as a child
Will influence my future as it’s filed

Exploration hits me as a teen
Early bloomers sure can be mean
I remember the first time I tried pot
And banged that girl I liked a lot

Life is awesome with chicks and beer
But the homework I do fear
For young adulthood has brought me to college
In hopes that I don’t bring my future the damage

With career in hand, I go out to find a wife
So we can multiply and create some life
Being an adult has its share of bad relationships
But watching your kids grow eliminates the hardships

The biggest bummer if I had to pick
Is that Viagra no longer does the trick
As an elder, bald again, I’m prone to rants
And well, you guessed it, I xxxx in my pants

Life is such a silly yet powerful thing
And its value is worth more than cha-ching $$$
For in the end there’s no need to weep
As I comfortably go to permanent sleep


...AND FOR ANYONE THAT'S SLOW, YES, I DID WRITE IT FROM A MAN'S POINT OF VIEW (IT WAS EASIER FOR THE RHYMING). :P

[jahannam]

wow... not bad at all Flames...
I don't think you could say that you're a beginner anymore!!

[Anonymouse]

BRAVO FLAMES. JOB WELL DONE I LOV IT!

[sSsflamesSs]

Hehe, thanks buddy. I don't feel that bad anymore.

Oh, and I didn't have a chance to compliment your work...I really enjoyed the one you wrote.

[sSsflamesSs]

My last post was meant for Jahannam, but thanks to you to, Mr. Amouse. :P

[sSsflamesSs]

The truth hurts, hehe.

[jahannam]

hehe.. nice poem anon... I'd title it SURFERBUSHIAN

[spiral]

heyy, I like this thread, very creative people!

and Jahnaam, I really liked yours, and how you included everyone in it.

so im giving it a try, so here it goes.

Nietzsche

I read about the “overman”
and of Friedrich Nietzsche I became a fan.

His extreme candor is often invigorating,
as his words are all, so illuminating.

Thus Spoke Zarathustra was the book
and the subject grabbed me like a hook

Now I ask to those who read
what you thought of dear Fred.

lol.

ok, that’s pretty bad, but ya, to those who read it, or any other books by Nietzsche, what do you guys think about him?

[Anonymouse]

Very well spiral.

I think the problem most people have is fear of what other person thinks of their poetry skills.

Let it all go and start to flow. It'll just come naturally as you start to express yourself lyrically.